With a scene so beautifully rendered, you don’t need a lot of explanation. I’m glad you left it so spare. I’m sure the temptation was there to explicate, explicate.
Yes, I did a version first which I disliked because it was too detailed and soft so I threw it away. Then this morning it came back and I read it as a voice memo and it was more bare, and then I cut 30 percent to make it has "hard" as I could.
I've been practicing shorter froms for more than a year and one finally clicked!
With a scene so beautifully rendered, you don’t need a lot of explanation. I’m glad you left it so spare. I’m sure the temptation was there to explicate, explicate.
Yes, I did a version first which I disliked because it was too detailed and soft so I threw it away. Then this morning it came back and I read it as a voice memo and it was more bare, and then I cut 30 percent to make it has "hard" as I could.